This is fabulous! I love love love it. The ending line got me right in the fangirl heart. I found it reminiscent of the ending of one of my favorite Lucians, Just the Same by leggomystego. It has the same wild joy/beautiful abandon/pure, simple love.
I love Lucy's line about the way the castle smells, and I love the image of them in the sunrise. I adore the narrative symmetry! It's got the same ring as "I feel that I can't stand much more of this, yet I don't want it to stop." Brilliant! You do me proud, my Lucian convert. This is absolutely gorgeous stuff. Yours came out much more Narnian than mine did! My story is kind of depressing.
I have decided that you are the Renoir and I'm the Monet, roughly, since you're all about the deep characterization and I seem to fixate on worldbuilding. Which is ironic since I absolutely prefer Renoir to Monet -- but then, that rather makes sense. Love this! You're fab!
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Date: 2010-04-28 05:19 pm (UTC)I love Lucy's line about the way the castle smells, and I love the image of them in the sunrise. I adore the narrative symmetry! It's got the same ring as "I feel that I can't stand much more of this, yet I don't want it to stop." Brilliant! You do me proud, my Lucian convert. This is absolutely gorgeous stuff. Yours came out much more Narnian than mine did! My story is kind of depressing.
I have decided that you are the Renoir and I'm the Monet, roughly, since you're all about the deep characterization and I seem to fixate on worldbuilding. Which is ironic since I absolutely prefer Renoir to Monet -- but then, that rather makes sense. Love this! You're fab!